[에세이 만점은 독서 교육으로부터!] Emily's Runaway Imagination by Beverly Cleary
Synopsis:
The tiny town of Pitchfork, Oregon is not a very exciting place in 1920, so Emily uses her wild imagination to entertain herself. She sure has fun-but some of her fun seems more like pranks and tricks to the people of Pitchfork! Emily is yet another wonderful character from the beloved author, Beverly Cleary.
Essay Question
Describe Emily’s personality, and give examples from the story that show her runaway imagination.
Student Essay
Emily is very curious about every little thing in the book. She is nice and caring but she can be very serious a lot of times. She can get shy and nervous in front of people, but then she doesn‘t, like in the hard-time party. Emily can get over the top, like when she fed her dad’s pigs rotten apples and she didn‘t even tell her parents! Emily usually wants everything to go perfect. I think she is a smart girl in school for her age. She knows everything about every person in Pitchfork.
If I be Emily for a month, I would because I have always wanted to live in a farm like she does. I think she has a great personality and a perfect life. It would be cool to bleach a horse. Emily and I have a lot of things in common because I have a runaway imagination, just like her. We can be different in a way because I’m not nervous about anything!
Teacher Comments
Good job...but we need to use paragraphs. A paragraph is a group of sentences about the same topic or idea. In this essay, each example of her wild imagination needs to have its own paragraph.
I think when you get to Emily having the hard times party, you need to start your second paragraph. The problem is that you do not explain enough for that example or about the pigs, so you will need to write more, because the part about her wanting things to be perfect needs to be a separate paragraph. You may put the examples-party, pigs-in one paragraph. What about when she bleached her father‘s horse? You should explain that part, too. Make sure you explain and describe those events more, however. We cannot know what a “hard-time party” is unless you explain it. Why is it called that, and who was there, and what did they do? What happened to the pigs...was anyone mad at Emily? Don’t forget the horse! Describe that part, too.
When you get to what you would do if you were Emily, then you have a new topic, and it should be yet another paragraph. If you are confused, let‘s make a list of paragraphs/topics:
1. Your first paragraph will introduce Emily and tell about her as you have done.
2. The second paragraph is about the three main examples-the party, the pigs, and the horse. Tell about them in the order that they happen in the story, however. Explain and describe each one clearly.
3. Being perfect/smart is your next paragraph. You need to add an example to it to help show what you mean.
4. Your last paragraph will just be the rest of what you have written (about if you were Emily and what you have in common). Notice you need to use this phrase: “If I WERE Emily”-that is the phrase to use there.
There, now you have a plan for a four-paragraph essay.